My LEGO Nexus Organization

All discussion about the Epic goes in this topic. Please don't read and leave, leave a comment or two about what you thought ;)

Important Characters:

Deamon World

Deamons:


Crioone [Cry-ooh-ne]  
Taverna [Tah-ver-nah]
Nara [Nay-ra]

Exaltoskull [Ehx-all-toe-skull]

Bellcast [Bell-kast]


Humans:

Hawk / The Scripter
Jet
Dolphin


Terra Eterna / Forever Earth

Renee
Patrick


Land of the Lost

The Female Magician-Lyela

Why don't you lock the epic topic so you make sure noone posts in there?

Because I trust people not to post there, that's the kind of person I am...

And please post comments about the actual epic here from now on ;)

Fine. That epic is long. I've only read the first 10 sentences.

Thank you, and that post is just the first part of the prologue...

Well now I have read the top 3 paragraphs. I just finished reading the end of the former king Forna. You are an excellent writer.

EDIT: How long will it take for you to put in the next part?!? I wanna read it so badly *starts to groan really extra loud*.

There are now two parts, and I plan to do 2-3 installments a day.
I am glad you think I am a good writer, and that you wish to read the next part.

I will say this in big bold letters;

GIVE ME THE NEXT CHAPTER! PLEASE GIVE IT TO ME, I AM HOOKED!

The second last part of the prologue has been added...

Come on ZLS, please give me more! I'm hooked on it and this is one addiction I can help til I get to read the whole epic and don't you dare say, "All in good time hypr, all in good time."

EDIT: I found a typo. It is in the 2^nd or 3^rd sentence. It says "borwn" instead of "brown."

2^nd EDIT: I found another typo. Okay, 1^st paragraph, last sentence. It says, "stilld a mistery" instead of "still a mystery."

3^rd EDIT: I found yet another typo. 2^nd paragraph , first sentence. It says, "garded" instead of "guarded."

Thank you for your support hypr. I hate typos a lot...

Your welcome ZLS. You deserve it, after all I've got hooked on it after reading the first part of the prologue.

Three parts of Chapter one are up ;D

How many chapters are there and how many more parts of chapter one are left?

Dunno... depends how many ideas come to me, and how many side stories and flashbacks I do...

Well don't you dare stop yet. It is getting really good, but who stole Renne? Why was Renne trying to take her own life?

Who took her is a mystery... for now...
But unless I worded it wrong, Patrick(her brother) was trying to kill her, she just wanted to leave earth(Terra Eterna)

I'm not going to stop quite yet ;D

Well it sounded like Patrick was in shock as Renne was trying to kill herself. I put myself in Patrick's shoes after I was sucked in.

Just added the fourth part to chapter one... it's short, but it's leading into chapter two, which isn't too close yet...

You won't be seeing to much more of the deamon world in chapter one, more of Patrick, Renee, the dog(maybe), and the mystery beast...

You are quite good at this epic ZLS.

Thank you... if only more people were to read it...

You could actually probably get it published.

 :o :o :o :o :o ;D ;D ;D ;D ;D :o :o :o :o :o
That would be really cool... although I think it would need a lot of work, and a really good editor...
BTW I added another part, this one's pretty long...

Awesome, but I can't read it right now. *starts sniffling* My sister wants on and I've got to let her on.

A nice twist to the end of chapter one...


Interlude 2 next  :D

In the first sentence of the latest part of chapter 1, I think you meant "engulfed" instead of "ungulfed."

W00tness ;D 100 views for the discussion topic :D

Thanks hypr, I'll go change it now :) and the second interlude is up. The main purpose of the interlude's are to give the main side story in the epic: that of the Attalna's hunting and deamon killing.
The main storyline is centered around Crioone, Nara and Taverna, but also includes magicians and the people of Terra Eterna, although the deamons are the most important.

Chapter two is next up :D

Don't forget about to add some comic relief.

Beginning of chapter two is up... don't worry, that post is just an intro to the story :D

How could you post just that many words when you know I am hooked and dying for the next part!?

I had to leave to go swimming>> training for lifeguarding ;)

Nice excuse. That is the first time someone has used it in that context. Have fun saving women's lives.

Sorry to all of my dedicated fans :P I will be gone for two weeks starting tommorrow, so don't look for updates...
and I got my bronze cross in swimming ;D

Gimmie another part please. Oh don't forget to vote in the topic in our team sub-topic.

EDIT: As you see olsonman and I are not apart of the team any longer. PM me if you want more details.

Took long enough [nothing against you] to get another part in.

Updated the epic, the next post is up, and I've added stuff to the first post ;D

I need the next post. Please! I'll send 4:) after you if you don't ZLS.

Sorry for double posting.

Is Nara dead!?

Double posting is not quite as bad in a board area where posts aren't counted, but still, I'll let you read the next part and decide for yourself.
By the way, this is only part one of the whole book...I've planned five :)

Dang! So Taverna is about dead and so is Nara. Crioone is the only one that is still alive!?

The next part is a bit different from what you may have expected, but all will soon be revealed...

From what I read and think, so far Nara and Taverna are dead or close to death along with the grey demon.

Nara and Taverna are hanging to life... Nara is in the worst condition

Gray deamon is still very much alive, he's just not thinking his plans through ;)

Oh. Thanks for clearing that up.

Next part is up... Interlude Three is next ;D

C'mon! Stop torturing me with chunks.

Did Exaltoskull die?

Wow... can't believe I'm saying this, but(GregF quoting>>)

Follow the story and find out :P

It sounds like he died.

The next chapter has begun...

Why do you got a cliffhanger every time?

It makes you (the reader) want to keep reading...

although if I do it too much, then you'd get anoyed, so I'll have do less cliffhangers...

No, I like cliffhangers, though I always return to read more no matter what.
You typed/ posted: "his hands moving around as if organising an imaginary collection of photos."
I think you meant: "his hands moving around as if organizing an imaginary collection of photos."

New part added, and this one is kinda longish ;D
Hopefully a few of your questions have been answered.

When will Nara, Taverna, and/or Crioone die?

They are main characters... If they die, it will probably be near the end of the epic...(not quite yet :P )

Okay. How many chapters did you say you were going to create? We're on chapter 3.

Around 30 chapters... hopefully, but Chapter three is an example of a short chapter... it's now done

What in the hell happened? Does it bother you I said hell?

I knew you'd have no clue, but I figured you might read this topic first, so I didn't write what happened...

Hawk told everyone who could here his telepathy that he was titled as the Scripter, and that he would plan a full scale attack on the deamon warlords etc. meanwhile, Hawk also seperated his soul from his body, but doing that, he also split his soul in half, leaving the white deamon(who you find out is named Bellcast) to basically destroy Hawk's body and the remainder of his soul...

Oh. I got you. I always read the epic first (if there is a new post) before I come here.

Interlude four is up, hopefully its easier to understand :P

Yes it is. I see that Exaltoskull is dead or dying and is being dragged across the ground. For what I don't know.

Exaltoskull is dying, and another deamon is dragging him towards the forest on Eterna Peninsula... I am making a map of the planet/island the epic takes place on, so you'll see where things are going on :D

A visual. Have fun creating that.

Its gonna be in paint, so don't expect much... :P

I am not gonna, but you can go a little more graphic language like dam. Is Nara a traitor?

Yay you took my advice. Since I am the only one reading it, it shouldn't bother anyone. should it? Where in the hell did that traitor go off to?

I always had planned for Nara to betray the team... but later on you'll fully understand what's going on >:D

I absolutely love the sig CRX created.
Why did Nara betray them? To save her family or for another reason?

Deamons don't really have family...
>>it was for another reason.

Do you know chapter it is gonna be in? Also, when are you going to post another part of it?

Most likely near the end of part one... and as for the next post-- soon ;D

How close is the end of part 1?

Let's see... I'm on chapter four, and my plan was for seven chapters... but it may be shortened to six if I can find a way to make the story flow nicely together in six chapters...

Next part is up ;D

Don't you mean 2 parts?
What did you mean b the word "emerlad"? Did you do a typo and misspelled emerald?
I love your cliffhanger.

I wasn't sure if you'd read the first of the two parts...
Yes, I meant emerald: Crioone is blue/silver, Nara red/crimson, Taverna green/emerald
Thanks ;D

Your welcome. I think I have become your untitled editor.

all good authors need an editor ;D

Yea, but I am a good editor. I am not mean when I edit your work while reading it. Don't forget to edit the emerald mistake. It is in your 3rd latest entry.

Exaltoskull is gonna become a Reaper if he wants to live!?

... maybe...

Chapter Five is up... return to their own world is getting close :D

I already read it and it is getting better by each post you make.

What in the hell is going on?

My sister suggests that you should take a creative writing class.

The rift is forming... but for something that will change your dimension from one to another, it takes a while...

And does your sister mean so that I can get better at my writing, or that I need to learn how to write properly?

My sis saids it is extremely fun, you learn how to write even better hooks, and learn how to write better. Some teachers give you a whole class just to write.

Cool! I might check it out

Does your school even have a creative writing classs? if you don't know then i suggest go talking to your Guidance Counselor about if they have so you can sign up for it next year.

It does, but its a grade 12 course, so I'd have to either take grade 11 english in summer school, or take the course without grade eleven knowledge  :-\

Creative writing is an elective. Though it is taken by mostly 12th because it is so popular.

Next part is up ;D

I've just got done reading it. So who is Nara going to? A sorceress? Another deamon?

Neither... its something else entirely...

A deity!

Anyways, I am confuzzled by what the 2-3 latest parts are saying.

 Crioone and Taverna found a dimensional gate-the rift- and as it opened, the two of them were transported back to inside of Metawar(picking up from where they were when Nara's betrayal happened).

In another spot completely, Nara escaped from a cage she had been put in by... well, I can't say what/who yet...

 As for the Interlude, Exaltoskull has accepted his true destiny, and is on his way to ultimate power and becoming a Deamon Shadow

Exaltoskull is becoming a reaper!

Chapter six: seeking the stars   is up ;D

Nara is in the desert in mud heading towards the thing.

Yes, that's correct.

Next part is up ;D

I am in need of explaining. What just happened?

Nara arrived at her destination... a giant tower :)

Why a giant tower?

The tower is a telescope of gigantic size... but you'll know that if you've read the last post of Part One in the epic topic, also of gigantic size :P

But anywho, I haven't posted for a while, so I decided to give all my fans a nice chunk to read... it took me forever to write it, so I hope you enjoy the bit of deamon history there :)

You are quite a talented writer.

Have you ever submitted your work for publication???
You really should.

Yay! Another reader!
It took long enough to get someone else to read this.

Anyway, isn't ZLS an awesome writer? He really should get it published.

Thanks guys, I really appreciate the comments... I should get to Part Two later on today. If you want to support the epic, put the banner that's at the beginning of the epic on your userpage with a link to the epic topic. ;D

-ZLS

Edit: Part two, Interlude seven is up ;D

Can you give me the code please?

Sure:


 :P lol

Do I copy all of that? I love your code.

EDIT: Nevermind. Go check my userpage I have it set it up.

Chapter seven has begun! Return to the basics :)

Awesome. Is part 2 gonna be all about the humans?

You misspelled 2 words; kilometers-1st paragraph, 3 line from top, 1st word in & warriors-2nd paragraph, 2nd line, 3 word in about.

Chapter one will focus only on humans(with the exception of the beast/deamon travelling with Renee). As for the rest of part two, humans will have more roles than in part one, but that's all I'm gonna say for now.

Is there gonna be any parts dedicated to the humans like part 1 was to the deamons?

part one started out with humans, then went to deamons. Part two will have much more human stuff.

Ok. That is all I needed to know. Thanks.

EDIT: Hey ZLS, when you typed the 2^nd part of chapter 7, wrote the following: "...Punching the button with his fist, the sliding doors began to open, pinfully slowly."

Did you mean painfully slow?

Painfully Slowly, yes... if I ever publish this, I will need an excellent editor :P

What about me? I edit your writing while reading.

maybez... if I ever get there. You've done good so far ;D

I help my sister with her writing pieces as well.

Next part is up </finally>

sorry its kinda short, but I'm wrapping up chapter one soon :)

When are you posting your next section?

Soon... within the next week hopefully. I'm caught up in homework at the moment, and I've jad slight writer's block >_> ...

Finally! The next chapter has begun!
Sorry for the long wait :)

Excellent!!

Nicely done.

Thank You ;D

Next part is up. Please add a comment or two. Updates should happen 1-2 a week for now. I'm trying to add larger parts for your enjoyment.

Edit: W00tness. 50 parts have been added to the epic since I started, including 8 chapters, a prologue, and 8 interludes ;D
Thanks to everyone who left a comment, especially hyprgig who encouraged me to continue writing. Thanks to MsRR for her great comments, and if you read this: Please, PLEASE read the epic and write youir thoughts on what could be improved, or just comments in general.

-ZLS

You show great devotion to this project. It is obvious your heart is in it. Keep writing!

Thank you very much ;D
It is comments like that one and many others that keep me going.
And yes, this is a big project for me. I hope to complete the story on this site, then edit the whole thing, like adding more detail and dialogue, and eliminate all spelling mistakes. Should take me a while, but I enjoy writing :)

Edit: Chapter Nine has begun. The search is on, and the object of great power will soon come into play :D

60 posts and 4 pages for the epic! ;D

Chapter Eleven has begun. I plan for Part Two to end with Chapter Thirteen. Hopefully it works out, and if you read, please leave a comment! ;D

Okay, I ended Part Two with an Extapologue, in other words, an epilogue in the middle of the story. Part Three is somewhat different than Parts 1 & 2, in that it will feature only one chapter, with multiple parts to it. Parts 4 & 5 will be like parts one and two, and at the end of the book, an Epilogue will appear, leading either into book 2 or 3, I haven't decided how to roganise the trilogy, but it will probably lead into book three.

Revivng epic discussion topic. I'm pretty sure this is allowed...

Part Three is done, and may be the longest post at MLNO. cool.

Part Four has begun, and the action of the story will begin shortly. Everything so far has led up to this. I'm almost done the whole first book! (atleastinplanningiam...)

wow. i cant wait til i got time to sit down and catch up on this ZLS.

You has up until April to catch up. I locked it for a while.

dang. i cant do it in that amount of time ZLS. im pretty much failing 10th grade as it is.

Well, whatever you can catch up on during that time I guess. If you need school help I might be able to help, via PM or Team Forum. While on Vacarion I planned out Parts 4 and 5, chapter by chapter. I'll be adding 19 chapters if I follow through with it, as well as 18-20 interludes, not following Exaltoskull this time. It will be two side stories.

Hope you have time to read it...

Heh. I'm working on chapter 15 atm. Going pretty well so far. and 5 pages!