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Title: Epic Discussion: The story of a young boy…
Post by: Dudebot5000 on October 26, 2008, 11:46:50 am
This is the first actual epic I've done. Who said school is mostly useless? Wait... That was me. :P

Anyway, C&C would be appriciated here. :)


Title: Re: Epic Discussion: The story of a young boy…
Post by: MsRowdyRedhead on October 26, 2008, 07:04:16 pm
Excellent "set up". I feel as if I know Kenji already.


Title: Re: Epic Discussion: The story of a young boy…
Post by: Dudebot5000 on October 26, 2008, 08:38:03 pm
Thanks. Thats kinda what I was hoping for, but  I wasn't sure if it would come out too great.

Oh, and because this is a school project, it had to be based on another memoir that we had read. However, unlike my classmates, this memoir is (almost) completely unrelated to the one I read. :P Any guesses as to what it was?

Edit: I'm changing the father's name from Sora to Kotetsu. Can anyone spot a reason, other than "I felt like it?" :P

And... New chapter.


Title: Re: Epic Discussion: The story of a young boy…
Post by: MsRowdyRedhead on October 27, 2008, 10:48:25 pm
The new chapter is GREAT.. I wasn't expecting you to go there.
I am too brain-dead today to guess anything tho...


Title: Re: Epic Discussion: The story of a young boy…
Post by: Rakoua on October 28, 2008, 06:02:38 am
Awsome!
However, you should post longer chapters.
There are also a few things I'd change, I can PM them to you later today, around eight CET when I post a new comic.


Title: Re: Epic Discussion: The story of a young boy…
Post by: Dudebot5000 on October 28, 2008, 02:20:12 pm
Well, the story itself isn't supposed to be all that long; over 5 pages.

Plus, it's more fun to annoy you guys with cliffhangers after only about 100 words or so. :P

*Is awaiting PM*