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Title: My Short Stories Post by: Jade on October 06, 2009, 01:54:17 pm I would really like some feedback on my short stories. Tell me what you think
Beginning Of It All http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,84.0.html A Friendship Is Born (pt.1) http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,93.0.html A Friendship Is Born (pt.2) http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,90.0.html Beginning of the End http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,69.0.html Past Revealed (pt.1) http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,72.0.html Past Revealed (pt.2) http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,79.0.html Past Revealed (pt.3) http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,83.0.html The End of the Jedi http://spacewars.smfforfree.com/index.php/topic,81.0.html Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Kritzelei on October 10, 2009, 03:39:57 am I've only read The Beginning of the End so far, but I thought it was very well done. I'll have to read the rest!
Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Flash-әdge on October 10, 2009, 02:43:52 pm Both pretty cool; not bad for short excerpts but unfortunately, I could only view two of them :-\
Agh, now I'm hanging in suspense >:( Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Jade on October 10, 2009, 02:52:47 pm Which ones didn't work?
Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Flash-әdge on November 02, 2009, 02:12:28 pm Whoops; forgot about this topic :-[
The ones in the middle didn't work. PS- Actually, it's good I forgot since this topic was getting old :P Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Jade on November 02, 2009, 02:15:42 pm Strange... I'll have to find out why.
Thanks for forgetting :P Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Flash-әdge on November 02, 2009, 02:32:37 pm *Chuckles*
Um... you're welcome? :D Although it may have been my computer... I'll try them out again. EDIT: They worked this time; it was my comp. Anyway, they're all good. The only problem I saw was that in "The End of the Jed", the dialogue was a bit choppy and things didn't flow too well. Other than that, they're pretty good! Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Jade on November 02, 2009, 02:40:48 pm I had to put the dialog from another member's story in there, since they both coincided.
Thanks for reading them! Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Flash-әdge on November 02, 2009, 02:45:03 pm Ah, okay then.
No problem. Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: MsRowdyRedhead on November 02, 2009, 04:33:13 pm They were excellend, MJ, tho I noticed the same thing Flash did..
Title: Re: My Short Stories Post by: Jade on November 30, 2009, 11:57:55 am I added some new stories, let me know what you think!
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