Ah, Call of Duty lied to me
I even considered making sure it was Stalin before posting but didn't.
Yes, that's exactly what I mean. If this were fleshed into a novel, the extra characters would be perfect, but here it's a little bewildering. Rereading, I can see that Mr. Winters is mentioned more times, but he isn't exactly
developed. You could go a little deeper into his personality, etc. Of course, that would add length. I admit that don't read nearly as many short stories as novels, so I'm not the best judge of that kind of thing.
You're welcome. They're fun to read, and I get more out of stories if I analyze them at least a little bit, so it's a win for everyone.
Yes, I did like the twist. I especially liked how you didn't just write "I am the killer!" but made the reader realize it in the course of a few sentences. It is a little bit sudden. Maybe if you foreshadowed a bit in the beginning it would be even better. I can't think of anything specific off the top of my head, though.
...now I feel like a slacker that I don't write more. Maybe I'll write a short story sometime and see if I can actually avoid the things I've criticized in your work
