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« on: August 26, 2008, 02:46:40 pm » |
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« Reply #1 on: August 27, 2008, 07:42:28 am » |
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I like the mystery of the whole plot so far, although i think you need to use more descriptive language. The whole story so far is really a good plot  |
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« Reply #2 on: August 27, 2008, 08:13:56 am » |
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Tha's as far as I can go with descriptive language, ZLS.  Thanks! |
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« Reply #3 on: August 29, 2008, 04:20:40 pm » |
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Interesting... Is this inspired by Dune any? Do you mean that half the planet is always day and half always night? |< |= |
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« Reply #4 on: August 30, 2008, 05:06:06 am » |
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I didn't take inspiration, and yes.
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« Reply #5 on: September 03, 2008, 02:00:04 pm » |
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That's interesting. That's the first type of planet like that I've heard of. Good originality.
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