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« on: October 26, 2008, 11:46:50 am » |
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This is the first actual epic I've done. Who said school is mostly useless? Wait... That was me.  Anyway, C&C would be appriciated here.  |
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MsRowdyRedhead
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« Reply #1 on: October 26, 2008, 07:04:16 pm » |
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Excellent "set up". I feel as if I know Kenji already.
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   The dream is free.. the work to achieve it is sold separately.OOC: An OOC expression of horror would confirm your humanity nicely.  MLNO. The only forum I know where expressions like the one above are commonplace. Everyone is frustrating in their own special way.
"Right is right, even if everyone is against it. Wrong is wrong, even if everyone is for it." ♥
"If you're not havin a good day, change your mind!!"
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Dudebot5000
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« Reply #2 on: October 26, 2008, 08:38:03 pm » |
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Thanks. Thats kinda what I was hoping for, but I wasn't sure if it would come out too great. Oh, and because this is a school project, it had to be based on another memoir that we had read. However, unlike my classmates, this memoir is (almost) completely unrelated to the one I read. Any guesses as to what it was? Edit: I'm changing the father's name from Sora to Kotetsu. Can anyone spot a reason, other than "I felt like it?" And... New chapter. |
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MsRowdyRedhead
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« Reply #3 on: October 27, 2008, 10:48:25 pm » |
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The new chapter is GREAT.. I wasn't expecting you to go there.
I am too brain-dead today to guess anything tho...
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The dream is free.. the work to achieve it is sold separately.OOC: An OOC expression of horror would confirm your humanity nicely. MLNO. The only forum I know where expressions like the one above are commonplace. Everyone is frustrating in their own special way.
"Right is right, even if everyone is against it. Wrong is wrong, even if everyone is for it." ♥
"If you're not havin a good day, change your mind!!"
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Rakoua
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« Reply #4 on: October 28, 2008, 06:02:38 am » |
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Awsome!
However, you should post longer chapters.
There are also a few things I'd change, I can PM them to you later today, around eight CET when I post a new comic.
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Dudebot5000
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« Reply #5 on: October 28, 2008, 02:20:12 pm » |
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Well, the story itself isn't supposed to be all that long; over 5 pages. Plus, it's more fun to annoy you guys with cliffhangers after only about 100 words or so. *Is awaiting PM* |
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