Message #123396

[Flipz]

No it's not bad at all!  Though for readability, the text should be in all caps, and the words "Retractible Spatula" in the first panel should be bolded.  Nice job with the different font sizes-I would never have thought of that.

And, since I keep forgetting to give this to you, here's the rest of the script for this part:

Image 3:
I:
scene: Stranger and SpaceDude1234567 entering a forest clearing where Flipz waits for them.  (Stranger and SD are near the lower-left corner, and flipz is just to the left of center.)  There are two ghost images of Flipz doing a backflip onto a high tree branch, and a solid (i.e. normal) image of Flipz perched on said branch.
Stranger: OK, Flipz, we got your message.  What's up?
Flipz: I think it's time Alex-erm, I mean, SpaceDude-and I compare notes on our new powers.  For instance--remember when SpaceDude discovered how to give himself a short burst of super-strength?
Stranger: Vividly.  And I have the scars to prove it...
Flipz: Well, I've discovered I can alter other variables, such as mass--
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Flipz: --density--
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Flipz: --and surface friction--
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Flipz: --so I can do awesome acrobatics like this!

*Note: Each of these connected word bubbles will also have a trail pointing to one of the ghost images of Flipz, i.e. he is saying them in mid-leap.

IIa:
scene: Stranger and SpaceDude1234567 standing on the forest floor far below (left side of panel).  The camera is looking over Flipz' shoulder from his perch on the tree branch.

SD: Sweeeet!
Stranger: Impressive.  Can you alter any other variables?
Flipz: That's why I wanted to compare notes.  Besides the ones I just mentioned, I've only been able to improve my reflexes, memory, speed, and--
SD: Speed? As in, I can do super-speed??  This I've gotta try!
Stranger: No, Alex, wait--

IIb:
Scene: same as IIa, but a blurred line of ghost images extends from SpaceDude's former position to the upper right corner.

Flipz:...you think we should have told him we're right next to a cliff?

III:
Scene: Young Beeky and Young Treecleaver, still tied to the raft as it falls down the waterfall.  The red bandana and the retracted Spatula are floating a couple of inches off the surface of the raft (to give the impression of falling).

(Square caption box): Meanwhile...
B31 and TC: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAA HHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH!!!!!!!!!!!!!

IV:
Scene: Same as III, but Spacedude, still going at super-speed, has rocketed (left-to-right) across most of the panel, shattering the raft's mast and dragging Beeky, Treecleaver, and the Spatula and bandana clear.  (It should be apparent that SpaceDude is doing this completely by accident, and was not trying to be a hero.)

B31 and TC: AAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAHHHHHH-urk!

To be continued, I'm going to submit this post so I don't lose too much if there's a glitch...