Hmm...now that I see it I'm not sure I like that hairstyle. Could you maybe try this one?
(BTW, TC's shirt should still be tan, just without the equipment on it.
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Also, could you do a hand-drawn version? I just want to see so I can make the final decision as to whether the story should be done by hand or by computer.
In other news, here is the complete meta-framework for the entire story:
The story will start in the present day, and will seem almost like just another adventure. However, after the heroes encounter the villian(s), a huge secret will be revealed about certain characters' past. At that point, the story will enter the first major flashback sequence, which will encompass the alt. SW arc. This flashback arc will also introduce the Exarthian Plague, though not by that name. Once that story has been told, we will return to the present, and a sudden catastrophe will put everyone in danger (heroes and villians alike). Everyone will get separated into smaller groups, and over the course of the rest of the present-day adventure, there will be two more flashback sequences (interlaced with the present-day ation). One will involve the Alt. SW characters' first few days in LU, while the other will detail Sam's adventures on the Exarthian, as well as the unexpected turn of events that lets him prove himself a hero. (A third, shorter flashback sequence explaining the true origins of the Plague may or may not be inserted/included as a bonus feature.) Finally, when everything looks hopeless (and I mean hopeless!), Sam will fly in and save everyone. However, the true villian will still be loose, and after an epic confrontation, the loose ends will be tied up and the story ended.
