(Double posting to keep the post size reasonable)
Also, you don't have to draw the word balloons if you don't want to. I'll be putting the text in them anyways so I can get the right font style, so as long as you leave room for them, it's OK. Either way works for me.
Image 1)
I:
scene: Captain Peachbeard stands gloating in the foreground while several of his crew carry off an overflowing treasure chest in the background. Near the crew are Young Beeky and Young Treecleaver tied back-to-back to the mast of a rickety-looking raft (Beeky faces downstream, which is to the right in this shot). Another crewmember stands near the raft with his sword out and a cut rope at his feet. He has obviously cut Beeky and TC loose from the rock to which the raft had been tied.
CPb: At last! Captain Beardbeard the Great's legendary treasure, his
Retractible Spatula, is mine!
II:
scene: First Mate Pit stands in front of Peachbeard, facing the river (Peachbeard himself faces the audience just like in the last shot). It is a closer shot (cutting both pirates off at the waist or maybe even higher), and the background is highly simplified to draw attention to Peachbeard's shocked expression.
FMP: Umm...Cap'pn? Do you mean that grimy old spatula that was on top of the chest? Uh...we, erm, sort of...left it with the prisoners when we cut them loose. I didn't realize-
CPb: Peaches!
FMP: I'm sorry, Cap'pn! I'll have the men-
CPb: No, not the Spatula-
III:
scene: An avalanche of peaches cascading down the mountainside from an overturned truck, with Peachbeard and the other pirates fleeing for their lives. (They are running towards the right-hand side of the panel; the edge of the river is just visible at the bottom of the panel.)
CPb:-it's an avalanche of peaches!
IV:
scene: TC and Beeky tied to the raft as it floats downstream. The camera is facing the right-rear corner of the raft, so Treecleaver is facing the audience.
TC: Uh...guys? A little help here?
=
TC: Anyone?!
*Quick note: an = immediately between two consecutive lines of dialogue spoken by the same character indicates that the second line is in a second word balloon that is connected to the first. If the = is absent, the character will use two separate word balloons.*
Image 2)
I:
Scene: the raft. The camera is facing the front of the raft, but is off to the raft's left a little bit (i.e. it looks similar to this:
/ /). Beeky's face is visible to the audience.
B31: Oh, no!
TC: Don't tell me. We're about to go over a
HUGE waterfall.
II:
Scene: the raft. reverse of previous shot (facing Treecleaver).
B31: Yup.
TC: Sharp rocks at the bottom?
B31: Most likely.
III:
Scene: Close-up of Treecleaver's face, with emphasis on his eyes.
TC: Bring it on.
IV:
Scene: Wide shot of the waterfall. The tiny raft appears to have just begun to fall from the edge.
TC:
BOO-YAAAAAAAAAAAAAAAH!!I'll give you the script for the rest of the images in a bit.
